Quote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 31, 2013, 04:52:23 PMpoems are amazing dun hate
wtf adamp
since when do you write poems
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January 31, 2013, 05:15:59 PM62
Off Topic / Re: The Target
January 31, 2013, 04:57:56 PMQuote from: Meteor on January 31, 2013, 04:51:45 PMthis is the one main thing that left me conflicted in the poem, i saw repetition used really well in another poem in a similar way but i was unsure as to how well it worked with my own
I just noticed how every verse starts with "the scene lays set". Not very appealing imo.
Other than that it's pretty good.
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Off Topic / Re: The Target
January 31, 2013, 04:43:08 PMQuote from: Eat4two on January 31, 2013, 04:38:25 PMboth
Is this a srs project in school or is it directed to me just cause I said you couldn't be poetic? :|
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Off Topic / The Target
January 31, 2013, 04:19:45 PM
What do you guys think of this poem I wrote, any suggestions for improvement would be appreciated
The scene lays set,
The target like a fish in the sea,
He walks ignorant of his fate,
Slowly approaching the peice of bait,
The scene lays set,
He stands to ponder,
What he thinks I do wonder,
But What use would thoughts of war be to me,
None thats what it would be,
The scene lays set,
Once a friend,
A comrade,
A brother,
But no longer,
The scene lays set,
The moment now imminent,
As he blinks for a moment,
I prepare to deliver his final judgement,
My blade primed,
My sights set,
The scene lays set,
An act of mercy,
Kindness,
Compassion,
What else could it be?
The scene lays set,
His final breath of the cold winter air,
His final feeling of hopeless despair,
The final time he'll feel his head,
The final second before he's dead,
The scene lays set,
The blade now buried deep within his chest,
For now it is his time to rest,
For his time has passed,
But the words he utters last,
"You think this is over do you not?
Little do you know it has only just begun"
The scene lays set,
The target now lays dead,
But what did those twisted words mean,
The gibberish of a dying man?
Or the warning of an unfolding plan?
The scene lays set,
The target like a fish in the sea,
He walks ignorant of his fate,
Slowly approaching the peice of bait,
The scene lays set,
He stands to ponder,
What he thinks I do wonder,
But What use would thoughts of war be to me,
None thats what it would be,
The scene lays set,
Once a friend,
A comrade,
A brother,
But no longer,
The scene lays set,
The moment now imminent,
As he blinks for a moment,
I prepare to deliver his final judgement,
My blade primed,
My sights set,
The scene lays set,
An act of mercy,
Kindness,
Compassion,
What else could it be?
The scene lays set,
His final breath of the cold winter air,
His final feeling of hopeless despair,
The final time he'll feel his head,
The final second before he's dead,
The scene lays set,
The blade now buried deep within his chest,
For now it is his time to rest,
For his time has passed,
But the words he utters last,
"You think this is over do you not?
Little do you know it has only just begun"
The scene lays set,
The target now lays dead,
But what did those twisted words mean,
The gibberish of a dying man?
Or the warning of an unfolding plan?
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Normal Server / Re: Ω.: ::Redemption:: :.Ω rank 2 huahueuaehauhehaeuaue sry butthed
January 29, 2013, 01:26:23 PMQuote from: Yz on January 29, 2013, 04:41:13 AMoshit am i getting kicked?Quote from: asd3840 on January 29, 2013, 04:29:46 AM
No Space Yet? T.T
:IGN: -SuperNova-
:Activity: 4hours everyday (-Saturday-6hours
:Specialty: PVP and BVB
will most likely have a space tomoz
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Off Topic / Re: League of Legends
January 27, 2013, 06:47:28 PMQuote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 27, 2013, 06:24:11 PMDo you even understand how new elo system works?
when is this new elo system comming out
cuz my elo is fked so hard
even when i am op or doing good my team fks it.
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Off Topic / Re: League of Legends
January 27, 2013, 03:32:11 PM
and entire enemy team were complete nubs
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Off Topic / Re: League of Legends
January 25, 2013, 03:19:57 PMQuote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 25, 2013, 03:07:06 PMtold u jayce wasn't ur thing
found my champion in ranked
-Assasin
-1 Shot adc / Support / apc
-Quadra and triple first game
-Ended my 13 lose streak l0l
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Off Topic / Re: Worms pro
January 25, 2013, 01:25:42 PMQuote from: Materger on January 24, 2013, 05:23:45 PMmat 2 gud 4 me at checkers
Nobody has beat me in checkers yet. 'w'
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Off Topic / Re: League of Legends
January 20, 2013, 07:09:18 PMQuote from: Meta on January 20, 2013, 06:51:22 PMmeta y dun u play anymoreQuote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 20, 2013, 02:47:14 PM
fk this ranked teams
1105 elo
in 1 fking day . 5 losestreak
haaaahhaaaaaaaa
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Off Topic / Re: League of Legends
January 20, 2013, 11:37:20 AMQuote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 19, 2013, 08:28:19 PMsee eventually you too suffered the nub teams
fkfk
went from 6/4 ranked to 6/7 because noob teams
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GFX / Re: First time in a while
January 19, 2013, 07:28:09 PM
pretty good but i really don't like the white borders on the top and bottom of it