Quote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 31, 2013, 04:52:23 PM
wtf adamp
since when do you write poems

poems are amazing dun hate

Quote from: Meteor on January 31, 2013, 04:51:45 PM
I just noticed how every verse starts with "the scene lays set". Not very appealing imo.
Other than that it's pretty good.

this is the one main thing that left me conflicted in the poem, i saw repetition used really well in another poem in a similar way but i was unsure as to how well it worked with my own

Quote from: Eat4two on January 31, 2013, 04:38:25 PM
Is this a srs project in school or is it directed to me just cause I said you couldn't be poetic? :|

both

What do you guys think of this poem I wrote, any suggestions for improvement would be appreciated

The scene lays set,
The target like a fish in the sea,
He walks ignorant of his fate,
Slowly approaching the peice of bait,

The scene lays set,
He stands to ponder,
What he thinks I do wonder,
But What use would thoughts of war be to me,
None thats what it would be,

The scene lays set,
Once a friend,
A comrade,
A brother,
But no longer,

The scene lays set,
The moment now imminent,
As he blinks for a moment,
I prepare to deliver his final judgement,
My blade primed,
My sights set,

The scene lays set,
An act of mercy,
Kindness,
Compassion,
What else could it be?

The scene lays set,
His final breath of the cold winter air,
His final feeling of hopeless despair,
The final time he'll feel his head,
The final second before he's dead,

The scene lays set,
The blade now buried deep within his chest,
For now it is his time to rest,
For his time has passed,
But the words he utters last,
"You think this is over do you not?
Little do you know it has only just begun"

The scene lays set,
The target now lays dead,
But what did those twisted words mean,
The gibberish of a dying man?
Or the warning of an unfolding plan?

Quote from: Yz on January 29, 2013, 04:41:13 AM

Quote from: asd3840 on January 29, 2013, 04:29:46 AM
No Space Yet? T.T
:IGN: -SuperNova-
:Activity: 4hours everyday (-Saturday-6hours
:Specialty: PVP and BVB

will most likely have a space tomoz

oshit am i getting kicked?

Quote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 27, 2013, 06:24:11 PM
when is this new elo system comming out

cuz my elo is fked so hard


even when i am op or doing good my team fks it.

Do you even understand how new elo system works?

and entire enemy team were complete nubs

Quote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 25, 2013, 03:07:06 PM


found my champion in ranked

-Assasin
-1 Shot adc / Support / apc
-Quadra and triple first game
-Ended my 13 lose streak l0l

told u jayce wasn't ur thing

Quote from: Materger on January 24, 2013, 05:23:45 PM
Nobody has beat me in checkers yet. 'w' 

mat 2 gud 4 me at checkers

just beat mat 10-0 at poker oye 2 gud

who needs all star bowling thing when u have worms


now i'm owning him at poker 2

bye tiny

Quote from: Meta on January 20, 2013, 06:51:22 PM

Quote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 20, 2013, 02:47:14 PM
fk this ranked teams

1105 elo
in 1 fking day . 5 losestreak

haaaahhaaaaaaaa

meta y dun u play anymore

Quote from: Xx Itz Ian on January 19, 2013, 08:28:19 PM
fkfk
went from 6/4 ranked to 6/7 because noob teams

see eventually you too suffered the nub teams

pretty good but i really don't like the white borders on the top and bottom of it