[Yoshi91]

Comment and Critique please:

I want to know what I can improve on it.
Thanks. 

[hawk5005]

Get a better render ( the current one is low quality ).
Try to blend the render in the background so it doesn't look like you just slapped a render on a random background.
The text is too small and can't be seen. Make it bigger and put it next to the render, not on it.
You should try and do something with the render, add effects to it, c4d's, brushes, anything, it looks too plain right now.
And add a 1px black border.

[BoutRoodi]

Good Job! But like Grim said, get higher quality renders.

[Yoshi91]

Ok, I've cleared up some of the stars on my render, now it looks a bit more clear, added a border and enlarged the text.
I like my text position though but thanks for advising that it was too small to be seen. K here:

Anything else amiss?

Edit* I've tried c4d's and stuff but it doesn't look very good on it. The best thing was the kinda c4d ish looking exploading star that have stuff going into like a black hole.