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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
May 14, 2013, 12:18:15 PM
yeah i try to get rid of those errors but i'm a bit lazy XD

i try to edit as i go but that doesn't work all the time i'll get around to proof reading when i do the next update

thanks for writing back and thanks for the compliment and this may not apply to you but i would like it if you people tore it apart a bit any problems in my writing at all (except the excessive use of full stops -_- i really need to work on my sentence structures) don't be too nice about it just give me as much criticism as you can find as it will help improve the story as it continues :)

anyway thanks again enjoy whatever i've got coming up next whenever i decide to update next time XD
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May 14, 2013, 11:56:55 AM
right i think i updated my story a couple more times as i can't remember what i was up to when i made that post XD

anyway new update is up on the other forum like i said you don't need to make an account to see it so it should be fine just use the link in the last post i did and if you can't be bothered scrolling up then i will post it in the next reply i make when i update it again XD

enjoy the new bits and criticise away
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
May 02, 2013, 04:38:26 AM
alright so it's been a while hasn't it and after a lot of stuff happening i've decided to start writing again

however
i won't be updating the story on this forum due to the amount of work i would need to put in XD (what can i say i'm lazy)

so i'm writing on another forum and i'm not asking you all to joing or anything but if you want to read more of the story i will be posting there from now on

link:
http://mhwiki.forumotion.net/t9517-the-elementalist-dumb-title-and-no-relation-to-mh-whatsoever

if any of you are still interested then by all means read away if you have any criticism please continue posting it here as it is much easier for you all

also if you would like i can inform anyone who wants that i have updated the story by posting here

also the story is a lot more organized on that forum and each update is now spoilered because that never occured to me before but whatever XD

if there are any questions post here or email me but otherwise

enjoy your days
and i hope you enjoy my stories
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
January 02, 2013, 11:45:15 PM
Quote from: Cooky on December 30, 2012, 09:50:07 AM
easy way to beat character limit

screenshot your post, then crop out everything besides the words

upload to image hosting website such as www.tinypic.com

post as an image
Thank you kindly good sir if i feel bothered to do that next time i'm writing (you may not think i'm being serious but i am superbly forgetful and very lazy dangerous combo) i will although i feel it might be annoying looking at white with the background of the forum
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December 30, 2012, 09:47:22 AM
so it would seem that there is a character limit on these posts which sucks some immense balls so i guess every now and then i will need to post the updates as a whole new post which might break the flow of the story anyway if there are any suggestions on how to fix this problem (which i doubt there are any solutions for barring being an admin) i will be posting a new reply with the update once it is reached

there is another site that so far hasn't suffered from this problem that i am posting on but i won't go advertising that just in case

so anyway here it is


update 3: December 30th 2012 (world didn't end but my computer almost did)

He awoke to the familiar yellow walls that were his home. The fire gave them this illusion and gave him warmth in these cold days.
He stretched his lazy muscles and prepared his breakfast.
"Hmm I'll need some more bread soon..."
He cut his loaf into a few pieces and let the warmth of the forge do the rest.

He heard the squeak of the door announce his visitor; he turned to find a familiar face.
"So how goes the forge brother?" the man rumbled.
This familiar deep booming voice was somewhat calming to the man working his metal, it meant he still had a brother... that he was still alive.
"Same as always, expensive and unfulfilling."
"bahahahaha come now do you truly hate something you were born to do"
"hmph just because I am good at it does not mean I need to like it..."
Despite years of smithing the young man lacked the beefiness of other Blacksmiths however he was famed as the best in the land.
"So let me guess why you are gracing me with your presence oh brother of mine"
"Well it is obviously because I wish to see my brother"
"Your sword is out the back it's hard to miss even for you"
The mass of muscle and armour made it's way to the small area behind the forge.
There he picked up a large silvery sword engraved with a flowing design somewhat similar to water on one side and a vine of thorns on the other, on each side were segment pieces of the blade, gold on the side with the flowing engravement and black on the other side.
"Tis a fine blade brother," he swung the sword a few times, eventually placing it on his back ready to be used in battle "however the metal is unfamiliar to me"
"It shouldn't be, I created that blade by smelting a new ore that was found in a few mines not far from hear"
"Oh have they named this new metal"
"Aye, it was dubbed titanium there was very little of it only enough for one blade at the price being asked however I infused it with Diamonds"
"Diamonds! Well well well being a bit frugal are we brother"
"Bah what is money when I could make the finest blade in all the land!"
"Hoho what is this? I've never heard these words spoken with your voice before tis a strange day indeed"
The knock on the door broke their laughter.
"Commander Grim we must be leaving soon," announced the voice
The brothers lost all sense of friendliness at these words.
"I'll keep the wine cool for next time Grim"
"I'll be back before too long Death"
With his brother gone Death had nothing left to do but continue his life's calling he cursed being an Enchanted blacksmith some days. It had caused him to miss out on a life of glory as a soldier, and had caused his final moments with his brother to be a short one.

He awoke in the world he has been in for so long. How long had it been? His gaze fell upon the little strikes he had used to count what he thought were days, time was so hard to tell without a light in the sky.
He rose from his position in the centre and reached for his oldest friend. He practiced forms and fought invisible enemies till he tired. He then lodged his scythe back into place and leaned on it as he prepared to sleep once more he had practiced for so long, how long had it been? He stared at the strikes he used to tell how long he had worked for, time was so hard to tell when you were stuck in a lightless dimension.
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alright first update is up and i expect the update for the elementalist will be coming out on Christmas and if it doesn't well aren't i a big fat forgetful Liar.

anyway i wonder if you guys notice the little messages i put in for the update titles *sits down in thought because he has nothing better to do than wonder if people even see his little messages no seriosuly i have nothing better to do*
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
December 10, 2012, 09:11:23 AM
welp update 2 is up and i must say i am extremely sorry for the huge break in the action.

i will be alternating between the two stories i am currently writing in other words next week i will be updating 'the necromancer' (hopefully) and the week after i will be updating this story and so on

the reason i have been a bit slow on this update is a family matter and unfortunately somebody i loved greatly isn't here anymore and so i took a week off of writing but i am back and i shall be posting regularly i hope and the reason the update is so short is because i wanted to stop it at that point anyway as the next bit will be quite long
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
November 28, 2012, 09:41:48 AM
ok so i lied

it was a little longer than a week but unfortunately i can't control the shit that happens in life (like for example my computer being used for assignments and downloading shit 24/7 by my mother and auntie. Hooray for family)

so anyway this will be updated next week and to tide you over for a week (all 2 of you who are avidly reading this and itching to know what is going to happen next) i am writing a new story along side this one so please enjoy it and once again feedback is appreciated

http://boutcheetah.zylongaming.com/index.php?topic=35400.0
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links up there by the way if it wasn't obvious. that will lead to my new story also any accusations of copying someone please bring it up i like striking assholes down who claim my ideas are copies of something else yes i am inspired by things but i never downright copy so there
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this is my second story i came up with this one is meant to be a story unlike my first so i will try and be as descriptive as possible and not a little bit lazy.

my first story will still be updated, i think i will have them a week apart sort of alternating so this week i will be posting this, next week i will be posting an update for "The Elementalist"

i plan on making this one quite long possibly just as long as what i plan for my previous story so i hope you enjoy the journey of the new main characters and once again any feedback and critiques are welcomed gladly

any questions will be answered if asked

you can do both of these by either:

1) posting a reply in this thread
2) messaging me on this forum
3) Sending me an email at [email protected]

so without futher ramblings here is my second story

The Necromancer

The night stormed on, the man walked the streets dressed like the reaper himself. The cloak flickering in the wind revealed the clothes of a beggar.
As he passed an alleyway he gazed into the distance.
"Not far now," he shuddered.
He made to move on but his amber eyes were drawn to the crime scene within the alley. It was truly a gruesome sight, six cats almost completely unrecognizable as cats.
"You poor souls..."
He made his way towards the one with the worst condition. He knelt down and looked at his right hand.
"I've got time to spare," his voice grim as he began his heretical work.

He awoke in a warm brightly lit room.
"Ahh! Your finally awake," the man put something down and stood up, the man was a tall man even by their standards. The human looked as though he had been run over by a carriage or maybe he had swum through a dump.
"How are you feeling? Any light-headedness? You hungry?" the man's words were tinged with worry and joy. For something as insignificant as a cat! What a peculiar human to have graced his presence.
He decided he would humour the human by answering his question. If nothing else, it would entertain him to see what the human believes he said.
"No I am not hungry, human and I do not feel particularly unhealthy. May I inquire as to where my friends and family are?" he yowled
"Very well spoken my friend. They are in the next room, you were the last of them to wake up," he pointed out the door and went back to take his seat.
Onto a more pressing matter
"You can understand me!"
"Of course I can. I ensured that when I modified your bodies you could all speak our tongue".

The human watched as the cat searched desperately for something on his body
"I – I see no scars. Then how could yo-"
The feline's eyes narrowed and it gave him a look of pure malice, it seemed that even the animals disapproved.
"Oho you are indeed a smart one my friend!"
The feline arched its back now and hissed one word "Necromancer".

"Yes my friend I am a Necromancer and I assume you have deduced what you are then"
The cat held its glare, as it processed its situation. He did not mind, he had some time left.
"Why would you waste your breath killing animals like us just to resurrect us as your undead slaves? Surely a human would suit your purposes more effectively."
"Well you see I did not kill you, I found you all dead or on the verge of it. I believe you should be thanking me for saving your lives."
"Why should I thank you for imprisoning us?"
"Well would a slave of the undead variety truly be able to talk back at their masters?"
The feline attacked him with its glare for a few more minutes and finally relaxed a little in its defeat. As it marched over to the door to its kin the man piped up one more time.
"Would you mind coming back with your little group? I have something I want to talk to you all about."
It stared back at him once more its eyes daggers attempting to stab through to this man's soul.
"Know this Necromancer. I do not trust you, there is no Necromancer in existence that brings back a life no matter how insignificant and valueless it is out of sheer good will however, I shall play your game for now but I want your word my fellow felines go unscathed."
The man thought of this proposition for a few sparing seconds and finally remarked, "I may not be able to keep this promise however I will attempt to as best I can. You have my word as a Necromancer and I shall keep it least my honour be tarnished"
"Hah a Necromancer with honour. You truly are a peculiar man"
The cat disappeared through the doorway and the man picked up his book once again.
"You have a good head on your shoulders cat, lets hope for both our sakes you can keep it there".

The cats gathered for the meeting the necromancer requested. The cat that had gone to fetch them, a black and white shorthaired feline, stepped forward.
"So what do you want Necro?"
"Well first i would like to exchange names my friends as i feel Necromancer is a bit crude as a name to be calling someone by, allow me to begin my name is Daniel"
"What game do you play at Necromancer?"
"I play no games with you i only wish for a simple exchange of words with the lives i have saved"
The black and white let out a small meow of amusement, "you have saved no lives here Necro only the dead surround you"
"You would not know how true those words were unless you stood in my shoes" he muttered under his breath "come now, would you really not do me the courtesy of letting me know your names when i have already given you mine"
A white longhaired female spoke out "i am Luna, the one who has been so rude to our saviour is known as Bloodpaw"
"Luna do not speak with something as dangerous and vile as this man with such familiarity"
"Oh and why not Blood? This man has been nothing but kind to lowly strays like us the least we could do is give him our names"
"I like this one Bloodpaw she understands how to be a bit more civilized and care free"
"Quiet Necromancer! Do not meddle in our affairs!"
"Well somebody is being a bit overprotective aren't they"
Bloodpaw raised his body now and puffed his hairs on his back.
"As their leader it is my job to be overprotective" he hissed
"Ugh Blood please stop. I will introduce you to the rest since it seems our 'leader' will not indulge you with some courtesy".
The introductions began with an ash coloured cat with silvery stripes running across his body.
"I am known as Ash" (most original name ever I know. Give me a break names are not my forte)
The next to step forward was a lemon coloured cat with white rings on its tail and the base of its feet
"My name is Dust"
The final one to introduce themselves was a black cat named Tacitus the others had introduced him for he only sat in silence.
"So now that we have exchanged our names I shall tell you why I have asked for your time on this day".

Update 1: december 19th 2012 (unfortunately this may be the last post i ever do as the end of the world is in 2 days and i will be moving in to my bunker full of food, water and survival equipment shortly *he says with the most sarcastic tone he could ever muster*)

She walked the cold streets under the pale moonlight, her long crimson hair whipped in the gusts of wind. The faint light nagged her sky-blue eyes. The alley was nothing special barring a cloaked man using a mancy she did not know, but that was to be expected of the poor.
   She left the man to his work, no sense in bothering a Mancer, she thought. The little paws tugged at her leg. Turning towards the light once more she was met with the sight of a bright white cat dotted with red. She ignored it for the time being; her 'home' was close now.
Within her cosy hole the cat slept soundly, how was she to know that the animal had followed her to her home.
"Maybe a friend would be nice after all this time," she shuddered.

They sat within that room for some time longer but finally an agreement had been reached.
"Fine we will do your work Mancer," Blood yowled, "on the condition that you tell me something."
"Oh and what would this something be?"
"Where is our sixth comrade?"
"Sixth?"
"Yes, there was another that we lived alongside," responded Luna
"What have you done with her Necromancer?"
"Ahh this may be a problem..."
"What do you mean? You know where she is... right?" Dust's voice gained a tinge of worry, "She didn't..."
"No, I used enough for six but I had not noticed one had woken up shortly after the mancy had taken affect."
"Then can we find her?" questioned Ash
"That's only the best case... in any case I do have a way to track her we shall search for her tomorrow my furry friends."

   The search had resulted in travelling to the ancient forest near the town. The lush green woods were a large attraction of income for the town as well as the fabled ancient dragon rumoured to live within these woods.
"She should be just a few kilometres ahead of us"
The woods were not harsh by nature, the bugs were not deadly, the flowers grew no thorns, the animals kept to themselves and yet, somehow, this woman managed to find and piss of the one deadly thing in the Ancient forest.
"Oh no"
He sprinted towards the girl. She stood there in bewilderment, oh if only you would move woman, his thoughts ran wild now. He could make it... no...

He managed to get her before she hit the tree but not before she took a few scales and claws directly.
"Blood you guys do the job I set for you..."
   They gathered around the woman, her wheezing fell heavy on his mind.
"Do not forget I have modified your bodies to be able to harness transformation mancies use it wisely"
"And what will you do?" asked a white red spotted cat
His eyes fell on the Black dragon growling before him as she asked the question, his answer was clear.
"Whatever you do... protect that girl and what little life she has left. Until she dies, that is your mission"

His right hand pulsated with a dark aura of pale light. His left hand held his newly drawn blade
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
November 14, 2012, 08:21:52 AM
Quote from: nourr993 on November 13, 2012, 05:59:49 PM
ik this is an old post but bee=b you=u emm=m pee=p i was bumping this so people would read ur work
and bump :|
v propbably someone loling my post

Thanks mate i was actually going to start posting more soon as my exams are over and i have another story i started writing so look forward to quite a bit in about a week from the fifteenth
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November 03, 2012, 08:47:30 AM
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Off Topic / Re: Sword Art Online
October 26, 2012, 02:03:41 AM
Quote from: MNHTTHNM on October 22, 2012, 08:07:08 AM
Any of you watching Sword Art Online???????????

i am watching it as well

Quote from: mikenny on October 22, 2012, 03:13:38 PM
Mee ep14 is most wasam

nah man that moment when he uses his dual blades to kill that boss was the best
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
October 26, 2012, 02:01:41 AM
thanks for the criticism i will see how it will be you gotta remember i intend to make this a game if i get into the course i want so the actual story is kind of aimed at that (basically i know how i want stuff to look and kind of haven't been bothering with it because i hope to make the environment anyway) but i will see what i can do about that after i finish my tests

i am thinking of a story that i plan on making a proper story you know descriptions and shtuff but that is still in the works till the 10th of november when all my shit with school will be worked out.
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
October 13, 2012, 01:28:02 AM
alright so i am doing this on the other forum i post to as well, and that is notifying that i have updated the story

the update shouldn't be too difficult too find if it is please notify me

i will not be posting next month as my final exams are going on in the next 4 weeks to make up for it i will be writing a double what i normally write for the December update so look forward to a lot of reading before christmas mwahahahahahaha
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Off Topic / Re: a story i am writing
September 22, 2012, 01:11:07 AM
ok so i have only just noticed that the block of text i copied and pasted didn't paste the whole story if you have read the story you will notice that around the point where james says "it's too much trouble" it just cuts off it isn't meant to cut off there there are about 50 or so words missing and i apologise for not noticing earlier i will be putting the bit that was missing in now

another thing i would like to know is:

how often do you want me to post updates to the story?

right now i am going to be posting additions to the story every month but it will most likely be a thousand words or more added each time unless i get lazy about it

so would you prefer i posted every week with possibly less content added but much more frequent (yes i just stated the obvious)

or

would you prefer i keep it at a month and add the stated 1000 or so words less frequently (again i know i am stating the obvious but whatever)
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